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lord you spun me out
of morning rays and mexican
china, out of paper elephants
and camomile flowers. you took
the tongue
and ears away from a deaf
mute and gave them to me
so i could hear the others
say speak the word of jesus
wide-eyed like children, so that
i could say my name is emily,
my name is emily but i can't
remember who
i am.


lord you gave me green
whisky when all i needed
was a glass of water in
the middle of the
night and arms instead
of a parting knife.
you wrote me a poem and
put it inside me and
the words smelled like sex
and tea leaves, carrot-flowers that
will emerge from the dirt
someday
smiling and all alone.

lord you plucked a boy
out of a tree and told him
to love me with his eyes
shut, but in the end it
was me who was too
blind. you gave me a sad
mouth and brown
eyes.

lord when you stopped
listening i threw away my
faith like pregnancy tests
and birth control. you stopped
listening and i counted the
colours in my bedroom, yellow-
grey-yellow. i sobbed and
pulled away feather
after feather until there
was nothing left except a
tiny naked bird trapped inside
my hands, wondering

why it was so small.
you look like your mother, in that thin disguise
your parting mouth, your shining eyes
and the way that you hate me, and the length of your hair
its the reason i made you
its the bond that we share
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Daily Deviation

Given 2010-02-18
church by ~emilygolightly ( Featured by GaioumonBatou )
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WrittenRevolt Featured By Owner May 13, 2011
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cajra Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010  Professional Writer
what - oh my goodness
i love this :heart:
such arresting imagery.
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iluffsmecookies Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2010
This is lovely. I especially love how you wrote the first part. The way you space it, you make it not just spaced-out lines but actual poetry, flowing from our thought but in a heartbreaking way.
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heart-defectant-art Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Student General Artist
i featured this in my journal [link] :heart:
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PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2010   Writer
Profound. Congratulations on the Daily Deviation Feature. :)
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TheBrassGlass Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
This is really very lovely.

Two possible things, though:

"camomile flowers" - chamomile?

Also, "it / was me who was too / blind"---it was I who was too blind?
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Molly-Snicklefritz Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010   Writer
Every once in a while you get the privilege to read a poem in which every quark of every atom of it falls together in just the right fashion, in such a way that one can only be reaffirmed in their faith in good things. This is one of those poems.
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holy crap its just so good
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2010
we stand on such thin pillars

This isn't beautiful; this isn't sad; you state the obvious... but you do it so very well, and with such eloquence... If I could judge perfection right now, I would find it in your words.
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Precaution Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2010
The last stanza is so incredibly powerful.

You're a genius.
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JackSolstice Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
can someone tell me what this means.
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lovemylittlelie Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
this is written so beautifully. it reminds me of the work of Billy Collins, or perhaps i just read in his voice. :P
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010   Writer
This is masochistically amazing.
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
the ending is awkward, and this really felt like it deserved to end with a mental bang (something slightly more straightforward that ties this up and leaves us thinking), but i like the rest very, very much. you have just the right level of indirectness and explanation. the overall flow and development of this was brilliant!
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cajra Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Professional Writer
hello now, where are all the comments on this? good poem, great imagery :heart:
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xxShadowexx Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
emotional, inspiring, touching.

beautiful.

breath taking.

:heart:
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freakytiki Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
We Emilys are something, no?

This poem...what a beautiful person you are, my fellow Emily.
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IReallyWannaKnow Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Poetry perfection. Congrats on the DD!
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StarInYourSkye Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
Amazing ♥
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Silverspark14 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
wow. the last line was especially powerful-- it's still ringing in my mind.
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Squee215 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
in all my years of being forced to read poetry this is the first one i enjoyed on my own. damn
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Nightshade-Kitsune Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
This is heart-breakingly beautiful.
Even the bedroom colours ("yellow-grey-yellow") seem to have deep meaning...
Congratulations on the well-deserved DD. :+favlove:
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Chillyjilly23 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
This is a beautiful work.
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The-Naked-Flame Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You really have no idea how much I related to this. It was like every word belonged to me... but it didn't.
What a successful poem!
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anicol Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
Stunning :nod: This really makes one think. Congrats!
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MekaMouse Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Student Writer
Beautifully written. You have a way with imagery and words.
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RevMEATZ Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Student Writer
"Amy In The White Coat" makes me cry every time I listen to oh my GOD

This poem is strikingly beautiful. The pacing, the earthy imagery, it's so evocative. Saturated withe motion. The repetition of "My name is Emily" is what drew me in; the repetition made it important... it stated the theme of identity. This kicks ass, so I'm going to stop dissecting it; dissection ruins art. This is fantastic.
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Dirtyrhymes Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
I can only hope this is not out of personal experience :heart:
It made me think some thoughts that were tucked away.
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animefan4eva419 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
This is really lovely in a bitter kind of way. Congrats on the DD!
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nomnomnomzapalee Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
awwwww cute! made me cry
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austheke Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010   Writer
To me, there a handful of things that make a good poem. Line breaks are important--just because modern poetry doesn't have to rhyme doesn't mean you can break it wherever the hell you want.

Syntax is important too: how the words sound, whether they read well aloud. How the words look, too; and most importantly, the images that they give you, the story they tell. Poetry is a delicate balance of emotion and technique.

The overwhelming majority of poetry on dA obviously lacks one or the other. Most poetry here plain sucks. Including my poetry. Including some past DDs.

You, however, deserve this DD. You really, really do.

Congratulations on a beautiful piece of work.
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aMidnightMasquerade Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Student Writer
lovely. and I woke up to that song playing this morning.
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Yobi-chan Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. All the feelings in the poet comes into oneself and one can feel it. So great. Congrats on the DD! :meow:
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010   Writer
This is painful and beautiful, and not at all what I expected from the title. Obviously a lot of emotion and thought was put into this. Congrats on your well-deserved DD. :)
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rydi1689 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't have a clue about poetry but this totally captivated my soul. I am in love with all the feelings it conveys and the beauty in each word.

I'm really glad I read it :happycry: Congrats on that deserved DD!
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apsara609 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
your words are beautiful :heart:

i love the progression, the losing faith, the naked bird at the end.
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)
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Tjalfehvalpen Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
"lord you gave me green
whisky when all i needed
was a glass of water in
the middle of the
night and arms instead
of a parting knife.
you wrote me a poem and
put it inside me and
the words smelled like sex
and tea leaves"

...mmmgood...I adore the last four lines of the part I copied into my comment. "the words smelled like sex and tea leaves" ^^

"i sobbed and
pulled away feather
after feather until there
was nothing left except a
tiny naked bird trapped inside
my hands"

...mmmgoodagain...this is wonderful and powerful imagery, something ordinary, like feathers from our pillow, made extra-ordinary through your poetic words. My brain tasted it and it was..delicious. :hug:

Great poem :)
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2008  Professional Writer
:)


really, emily, why aren't you submitting to magazine's or chap-book making?

this is love. words are wonderful.
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amarlborohallelujah Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2008
i love this.
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cynicalxpoet Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2008
This came together really well...
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